What do you do with excess points of view

The moonlight spilled onto a bed of clouds, washing it into a sea of the soon chilly air.

There might come a moment when you decide to delete chapters, scenes, and characters from your manuscript in attempt to narrow down and focus on the main plot and intertwined subplots.

Sometimes it happens when you keep writing and don’t stop, only to make room unless you drown in a mess of thoughts, unable to navigate through the stifling closure.

Too many points of view may spoil the suspense and foreshadowing of future events in the book. It might get boring and predictable.

Sometimes it also accidentally repeats scenes that are unnecessary, which can also lead to head-hopping tendencies. If a character knows the thoughts of another, it would not be fin to read, and probably makes writing less fun.

Does the relationship of particular personality, thoughts, and feelings make sense here?

As a reader, we want to feel how the character feels and like it is in life, judging feelings from another characters perspective might effect how we perceive the original character’s actual thoughts.


Belated Halloween Prompt (play on how words sound with the seven deadly sins)

Bitterness of the lye meant to clean up an unwanted mess

Steel yourself with determination and aspiration because you cannot own what was never yours

They make us envy the mystery in turn making us all masochistic, when doth thou confess?

To the lust that has swept through this land of imagination, knocking silently on all doors

Anger is often when they flee, writing best in contemplation, and the rationality sores

Gluttonous for reward from the next evanescent experience

They knock to kill only when theres compensation for lack of allegiance

Photography and poetry: Illusion of perception

What is seen is different than what we extract from it, which is different than the story behind what we see.

(A model car is ina shoebox on a table. Zoom out and the road is really five feet from the table.)

What are we given and why are only given so much of the story? And in response, what do we really perceive? Maybe it wasn’t the big picture or the details.

Crop out the borders. Take a photo from the angle of a puddle to elaborate an image above to look as if there is a a a wedding in front of a castle when the castle is really miles away.

What is your experience when the description not the described?

Writing Prompt: flash fiction ideas (and question)

  • How not to start your morning (a satire)?
  • Day in the life of…
  • Shopping list that became a novel
  • Loneliness place in the world
  • How to make devil’s food cake
  • The top ten complaints I hear walking down Main Street
  • Things I lost in under four minutes
  • What people are thinking at this moment in fifteen different countries around the world
  • Secrets that never were because you never told them
  • Life of a garden
  • Bookshelf history
  • Body language and what people might read correctly and why they wouldn’t
  • If you could bring three people back to life, what would you say to them?
  • All your questions told in acrostic poems

Side note (feedback request + recommendation)

A reader knows what works, what doesn’t and is a perspective outside the authors mind. If you are interested, I wanted to know what your thoughts were on a novel I’ve been working on.

What is confusing, awkward, what worked, what did not. If you upload a story of yours, I’d be interested in checking it out and hopefully give some advice as well.

Their site is Inkitt.com..

Update: I have taken my story down, but if you’d like to read and possibly give feedback, I’d be glad to share a google document of my story. Here is a link: Quirky Questioning Queer

Synopsis: Michelle tries to make up for a false accusation and somultaneously become closer to her friends, away from her parents. Kristina always travels, and Ayira just sounded more interesting. Curiosity has its consequences.

Themes include desire to escape, confusion of identity, consequences of ideas, and how to react in chaotic situations.

I recommend seeing what other people have written as well as uploading your own or sharing via blogs/affiliate sites.

Thank you and happy writing!

Bad Writer Habits

Note to former, overly competent self: “Save the sarcasm for dialogue amongst your characters. And don’t resurrect Genghis Khan to make your history class scene interesting.”

  • Sometimes we adopt ideas that are actually stumbling blocks in the queue of our writing journey (if you’d like to call it such). We might get an idea from bad reviews, ideas about what good writing is, opinion bleeding into a reasonable critique. (How do you distinguish the two when giving writers advice? My advice is terrible). And when I read a book before surfing the web for reviews, I’m usually shocked by how the book is seen.
  • When reading a book, my interest is in the story, regardless of wether the story is realistic and fitting the context or somehow faulty or awkward or – let’s admit it – crossing the line.
  • Then forgetting the reminder: it is
  • And we live in a world where post-truth, at least according to the news, is a thing. A very bizarre thing.
  • another habit may be thinking that to read outside our genre of writing is lethal and pompous. I write in a genre that I sort of invaded with language I stole – maybe borrowed – from another genre. Easy solution: read whatever you can understand and are inspired by.
  • That is, beatnik + historical fiction + suspense + science fiction = contemporary young adult fiction. Sounds like Kurt Vonnegut…
  • Maybe it depends.
  • Maybe it will take patience, a genius, and a person with humility.
  • Pride got the best of me as did boredom and loneliness. Maybe, maybe, instead, I got in the way of my imagination. There comes a point where researching takes over. Imagination is okay. Any critique gets your wheels going. Coffee + hiking + doing something you don’t do every day = dopamine and adrenaline rush?
  • What are some of your bad habits that became obstacles to your inspiration?
  • what are some habits you’ve changed and adopted that work?